tanka previously published in Ribbons
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ouch.
Posted by:eric | October 01, 2007 at 12:38 AM
This is something my wife would really like. I'll have to make sure she doesn't see it.
Great, Aurora.
Posted by:collin | October 01, 2007 at 12:42 AM
even my slow drip coffee isn't good anymore!
somber stuff
Posted by:shane | October 01, 2007 at 02:03 AM
If I read this as spoken by someone looking in a mirror, does that make it brighter or bleaker?
Posted by:Bill | October 01, 2007 at 11:46 AM
Eric, Collin, Shane, and Bill - thanks.
Bill - I'm pretty sure it winds up the same.
Posted by:Aurora | October 01, 2007 at 12:04 PM
Enjoyed.
Posted by:Robert | October 01, 2007 at 06:41 PM
I think it's worse if the speaker is saying this to herself. But, it does sound more like the sad (all-too-common) refrain of a love relationship gone bad. The old Serbian Water Torture Treatment.
As Dwight Yoakam sang,
"Little things that used to please you
Are all the things that I do wrong."
Posted by:david giacalone | October 01, 2007 at 08:40 PM
Robert - thank you.
David - if you have to invoke Dwight Yoakam, then it must be bad. :)
Posted by:Aurora | October 01, 2007 at 08:50 PM
Intriguing.
Posted by:Masago | October 01, 2007 at 09:25 PM
Love it!
Posted by:Felicia Dahl | October 01, 2007 at 10:20 PM
yes, ouch, but nice work.
Posted by:Janet | October 02, 2007 at 09:46 AM
Good one
Posted by:Matt | October 02, 2007 at 05:57 PM
Vaughn, Felicia, Janet, and Matt - thanks for taking the time to read and comment.
Posted by:Aurora | October 02, 2007 at 06:05 PM