morning Tai Chi--
the atmospheric dust
dances with me
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Very nice.
Posted by: Jennifer | May 12, 2008 at 11:56 AM
Thanks Jennifer! Glad you liked it.
Posted by: Andrea | May 12, 2008 at 03:59 PM
enjoyable read, unique.
Posted by: janet | May 12, 2008 at 05:57 PM
I imagine the dust particles to be magical.
Posted by: Dhani | May 12, 2008 at 10:03 PM
Thanks Janet and Dhani, I am very pleased that you liked my ku!
Posted by: Andrea | May 13, 2008 at 02:21 PM
Excellent dance!
Posted by: Alex | May 13, 2008 at 02:49 PM
Thanks Alex! I also had a second version, slightly different:
morning Tai Chi--
the motes
dance with me
Posted by: Andrea | May 13, 2008 at 04:53 PM
Enjoyed.
Posted by: Robert | May 13, 2008 at 06:12 PM
I'm probably being the minimalist today but I really like your second version even more! ;-)
morning Tai Chi--
the motes
dance with me
all my best,
Alan
Posted by: Alan Summers | May 14, 2008 at 04:02 AM
Thanks Robert and Alan...
actually, I am still undecided between the two versions but I am a minimalist too and completely understand your choice!
Posted by: Andrea | May 14, 2008 at 05:02 AM
Here's another vote for "motes." Excellent ku.
Posted by: Bill Kenney | May 16, 2008 at 12:30 AM
Thank you very much, Bill! Your opinion is very important for me...
Posted by: Andrea | May 16, 2008 at 04:09 AM
Hi Andrea,
I like this one, too. A tiny variation of Alan's and Bill's suggestion: "dust dances with me". :)
Posted by: aurora | May 16, 2008 at 11:13 AM
Thanks Aurora!
Something like this?
morning Tai Chi--
dust dances
with me
or
morning Tai Chi--
the dust
dances with me
Posted by: Andrea | May 16, 2008 at 12:15 PM
I like version one. But that is just me.
Posted by: aurora | May 16, 2008 at 12:45 PM